This week’s #TankaTuesday challenge is Ekphrastic, featuring the image below:

The Expected One
1860
painting by Ferdinand Georg Waldmüller (Museum: Bavarian State Painting Collections) wikidata.org

At first glance, it looks as if the young woman is holding a cell phone. But of course, that can’t be because the painting was completed in 1860. I’m sure the young woman is holding a prayer book, so there’s really no mystery in the painting. But it’s fun to speculate!

I’ve created a Double Ennead, a 99 syllable form comprising three stanzas of syllables (6, 5, 11, 6, 5). The three stanzas help to tell a story. Punctuation, end-rhymes, are all up to the poet.

The Lovers

He loves me—my prayer,
hazy daydream songs
recited on a pathway to nirvana
if only it were so...
my heart, he holds dear

She loves me—my request
without her I'm dust,
I wait to declare my love for her beauty
pink roses match her cheeks
dainty honey lips

A prayer to the gods
for sweet summer love,
clandestine moments shared between chaste lovers,
their arms entwined, hearts joined...
two stars in the sky

© Colleen M. Chesebro

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50 responses to “The Lovers, Double Ennead”

  1. That is beautiful. It definitely captures the multiple plots in this painting.

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    1. Thanks, Jacqui. I found this image on Apple News… people thought the young woman was holding a cell phone. Most folks are too young to remember going to church on Sunday carrying a prayer book. LOL!

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  2. Your ennead is so nostalgic and charming.

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    1. Thanks, E.C. I thought the couple was rather lovely. The boy is rather silly, but still very sweet.

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      1. You’re welcome. Ah yes, I remember the days when silliness was a mandatory part of wooing. lol

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        1. Ha, Ha! So funny. Good memories.

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  3. Masterful Colleen 🙌

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    1. I’m out of practice! I’ve been busy and must find time for poetry every day! But thank you, Angela.

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  4. Ah, sweet love . . .

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    1. Young love is so magical. 😍

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  5. I really like how you focused on one in the first, the other in the second, and joined them in (chaste) anticipation in the third. I haven’t written using this form yet, but I might try it for the journal submission 🙂

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    1. Experiment with the form. It’s very liberal other than the 99 syllables. End rhymes really make this form shine. Have fun! You get three entries for the journal. Mix or match! xx

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      1. OK sounds good and looking forward to it.

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  6. I like the way the two stanzas merge in the third stanza. You’ve captured the setting’s atmosphere too. (K)

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    1. Thanks Kerfe. I was trying to get the perspective from each. I like three stanzas because you can do so much with them in viewpoint, and imagery.

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        1. I agree. That’s why we like the shadorma. LOL

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          1. I never thought about it, but of course.

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  7. This is so tender and beautiful Colleen.

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  8. Hi Colleen. here is my response to this week’s tanka challenge – ‘The Expected One’.

    Spotlight Poetry – Sunday After Church – A Poem by Goff James


    Have a great day everyone.

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  9. Beautiful poem, Colleen! I loved it!

    Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
    http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com

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  10. What a lovely love poem, Colleen. I love how the point of view changes with each stanza!

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    1. There’s so much you can do with this form. I like three stanzas. It opens up your message.

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      1. It’s a good balance and movement.

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          1. You are welcome.

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    So beautiful, Colleen 🙂 I have a feeling they will live happily ever after!

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    1. Thanks, Denise. The poetry created by this painting’s inspiration has been so good this week. Great fun!

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  12. I love your new created form and it looks so pretty on the page ❤️

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    1. The Double Ennead is so fun to write. I created this several years ago. I think it has great rhythm and flow. The best part is you can add rhyme, or not… there’s a lot you can do with it.

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  13. This poem is very whimsical, Colleen. A lovely fit for the picture.

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    1. Thanks, Robbie. It was hard to realize the woman wasn’t carrying a cell phone!

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  14. This is beautiful Colleen so of the painting’s era . Gentle and timeless.

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    1. Thanks, Willow. The young man sure has a silly infatuated look on his face!

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      1. Yes he has 😊😊

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  15. So lovely, Colleen. I enjoyed the three perspectives – a wonderful use of the form and quite romantic. ❤ ❤ ❤

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  16. Beautiful and tender-hearted story. Great word artistry. 🩶🙏🩶

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  17. Oh, boy… this was so, so beautiful. Simpler times 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much. I think I channeled the date of the painting. LOL!

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  18. Romance lives 💕

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  19. Gorgeous, Colleen ❤

    without her I’m dust,

    And that line pierced me!

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Thanks, David. The boy has such a silly look of adoration on his face. 🩵

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  20. Hey Colleen, I thought you might enjoy hearing that a uk news site has an article that lists several photos which are supposed evidence of time-travels… this photo is one of them. Their caption of it says, ‘it appears to show a woman operating an iPhone.’ 😂
    I guess the new generations aren’t aware that prayer books and books in general were carried along with the reader back then.
    I’ll give you a link, if you want to see it. Let me know.

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