My Box

Kim is hosting dVerse:

Your challenge today is to write a poem about your own metaphorical box. It doesn’t necessarily have to be about a relationship, but I would like it to be autobiographical, free verse, and in three stanzas similar to those in Clarke’s poem: the first stanza describes the box; the second what is in it; and the third where you keep it, with a summarising list in the final two lines.

https://dversepoets.com/2024/04/09/a-box-of-poems/

My box is crafted from antique bricks

Stacked high with prism-like lips

Made from bone, straw, and lime

the date stamp shows my age.


Inside I hide those unpretentious dreams,

Along with old sufferings and wild schemes

Shut away in this aged-old place

I only visit occasionally.


My box lives in the liminal vapors

Like smoke curls around burning papers

Ancient secrets dark and heavy,

Hidden for eternity—longing to be free.


© Colleen Chesebro

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72 responses to “My Box”

  1. I love “the liminal vapors/like smoke curls around burning papers”! Good stuff!

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    1. Thank you so much. I wasn’t sure this would work, but it was fun trying.

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  2. I love the idea of a box ‘crafted from antique bricks’, Colleen, which you ‘hide those unpretentious dreams’. It’s interesting that it also contains ‘old sufferings and wild schemes’, a bit like Pandora’s box.

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    1. Exactly! It’s where I stored all the chaos from my past. Much of these old burdens I’ve let go long ago. This box holds family secrets that I hold for my children. Some secrets don’t need to see the light of day. I loved this prompt so much, Kim. I can see me reworking this poem into a longer version.

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      1. I’m delighted you loved the prompt, Colleen, and look forward to the longer version.

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  3. This makes me think about how common it is to shut things away and not revisit them. I think that poetry allows us to revisit these kinds of thought spaces. I enjoyed your poem.

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    1. Thanks, Ali. I couldn’t help but think that some secrets need to be kept and stored away. The box was the perfect location!

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  4. We must be related, Colleen.

    “Inside I hide those unpretentious dreams,

    Along with old sufferings and wild schemes

    Shut away in this aged-old place

    I only visit occasionally.”

    Wow! This is so relevant and wonderfully woven.💟

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    1. Thanks Franci. Those words felt almost like I wove a spell to house those ancient secrets. We are very much related!! Our souls surely connected long ago. 💖

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      1. You are most welcome, Colleen. I loved your poem, and read it several times. 💖

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        1. Thank you, Eugi! That makes me happy. 💖

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          1. You’re welcome, Colleen!

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  5. You taunt the imagination here, Sis!

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    1. Thanks, Sis. I think some secrets should be kept and never let out. LOL!

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  6. The middle stanza really hits home for me. The reader can really feel the pull and connection. I think we all have had dreams and schemes that didn’t work out so well. 

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    1. I agree, especially as we get older we look back and wonder at some of the situations we got ourselves into. LOL!

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  7. This is lovely, Colleen. I enjoyed your box although I think you should let those poor secrets out. I have also written for this challenge and will post later today.

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    1. My box holds secrets from my children now. Those secrets need to stay burried. I let most of my childhood trauma go long ago. I can see me working on this poem some more. Kim comes up with some of the best prompts! I’m glad you joined in. Saturday is the next poetry reading. 🥳

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      1. Yes, I saw that and I will join 💓. I decided to post tomorrow as I had Growing Bookworms and Story Empire out today ☄️

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        1. It’s so busy. I’ve got to get caught up on book reviews! 🤯

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      2. I understand about some things staying buried. I’ve done that too 🌸

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        1. I knew you would understand, Robbie. 🌸

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  8. Beautiful, Colleen. I like how you describe the box and then the contents it holds. I hope those secrets can be released.

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    1. Thanks Merril. Those secrets need to stay burried. Sometimes there’s no value to letting old secrets out. They’re best left in the ether.

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      1. You’re welcome, Colleen. Yes, that’s definitely true. I wasn’t sure from the poem though–it sounded like they wanted to come out.

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        1. Maybethose secrets do want to come out… but I can’t see how it would allow for healing. Some things are better left unsaid.

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  9. There seems to be a theme developing for this prompt. So many of us have secrets stored away in boxes that are a weight on us. Maybe it is time to take some initiative and set ourselves free. I am considering it.

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    1. This box holds secrets from my children and need to stay buried. But, our own childhood trauma secrets… those should come out and set us free. I did this several years ago and it was most freeing.

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  10. From seanatbogie to you with thanks for your poem.

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    1. Many thanks to you, Sean.

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  11. A poignant and relatable box, Colleen! I especially admire this part; “My box lives in the liminal vapors/Like smoke curls around burning papers.” 💖💖

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    1. Sanaa, thank you so much. I’ve been in a writer’s stupor. It felt good to write again.

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  12. “Inside I hide those unpretentious dreams,

    Along with old sufferings and wild schemes

    Shut away in this aged-old place

    I only visit occasionally.”

    You captured a universal feeling so beautifully in this stanza, Colleen! And your third stanza is truly beautiful.

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  13. We were thinking along the same lines… and if we should ever open it remains to be seen…

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    1. Exactly! It’s best to leave some of those secrets buried.

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  14. A lovely poem Colleen. A lot of boxes seem to hold secrets!

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    1. I think we all have secrets, Dwight. Especially poets and writers. LOL!

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      1. We’ll never tell! :>)

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  15. An amazing interpretation of Kim’s challenge … high time you let those dreams out .. fly high.

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    1. Thanks, Helen. My dreams are flying high this year! Thanks so much for reading.

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    1. Aww thanks so much. This was such a fun write.

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  16. “My box lives in the liminal vapors” Great line, Colleen. Sounds like you and Bjorn keep some kindred things in your boxes. Like I told him, when the time is right, warm sea breezes will work their way to opening them. Mysterious and enchanting poem, my friend.

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    1. Thanks, Lisa. I want to work on some rewrites for this poem. I think we all have those places where we hide the shadows from our family. I want to add those reflections.

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      1. You’re welcome and look forward to the revisions.

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  17. Great poem of your box of heart and spirit.

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    1. Thanks E.C. I want to work on some rewrites for this poem. I think there is more there, as well. 💜

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  18. WOW this is good, 5-Star.

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    1. Thanks so much, V. I appreciate your comment.

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      1. You’re most welcome–and I’ll be stopping by later to thank you for the Follow😊

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  19. How intriguing, Colleen. This is wonderfully atmospheric and full of hints into something secret and mysterious. You made me want to know more about your box. 🙂

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    1. Thanks, Diana. I think I will work on some rewrites for this poem. We all have those secretive places, and as a mother we often guard our children’s secrets too. 💜

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      1. Yes. This one is worth the effort. I really like it.

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  20. Such a powerful write, drawing not only from the beautiful stuff we try to keep safe, but also the dangerous ones that ought to wait their time. Really enjoyed the evocative imagery, especially here : “

    My box lives in the liminal vapors

    Like smoke curls around burning papers”

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    1. Oloriel, thanks so much for your kind comment. We all have those secretive places, don’t we?

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  21. “My box lives in the liminal vapors

    Like smoke curls around burning papers”

    This is a lovely comparison, Colleen. 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much, Aishwarya. 💖

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      1. You are welcome, Colleen. 🙂

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  22. Deeply intriguing, Colleen. I enjoyed the flow in your verse and the mystery in the box.

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  23. I am captivated by this, antique bricks speaks to me of a history of secrets, bricks also speak of secrets securely held. That last stanza is wonderful.

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    1. Thank you, Paul. I appreciate your comments so much.

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  24. Some great lines here.

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